weather and my news

2021-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I told you weather was fine at this wednesday. After I hung up the phone. I knew to read wrong news. the news was other day. Wednesday was cold . As what you told. It was 꽃샘추위. It was very cold yesterday. It was -9 tempurature. and It was a lot of snow . I had a happy news. my customers was interested my new product. I will make an introduction this month. the customers were SKHyix, SK , Oracle and Samsung . They was all huge company. but I got a problem. I have not gotten a new team member. so I have developed new product together with freelancer. so I have a lot of work . but I couldn`t keep the schedule .

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Sir [이름]. Happy weekend!

- T. Beth

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I told you weather was fine at this wednesday.

>>> I told you the weather was fine last Wednesday.

After I hung up the phone. I knew to read wrong news.

>>> After I hung the phone, I knew I read the wrong news.

the news was other day.

>>> The news was from the other day.

Wednesday was cold .

>>> coorect

As what you told. It was 꽃샘추위.

>>> As what you said, it was 꽃샘추위.

It was very cold yesterday.

>>> correct

It was -9 tempurature. and It was a lot of snow .
>>> The temperature was -9 degrees and it snowed a lot.
I had a happy news.

>>> correct

my customers was interested my new product.

>>> My customers was interested in my new product.

I will make an introduction this month.

>>> correct

>>> OR: I will make a presentation this month.
the customers were SKHyix, SK , Oracle and Samsung .

>>> The customers were from SKHyix, SK , Oracle and Samsung .

They was all huge company.
>>> They are all huge companies.
but I got a problem.

>>> But i have a problem.
I have not gotten a new team member.

>>> correct

so I have developed new product together with freelancer.

>>> So I have developed the new product together with a freelancer.

so I have a lot of work . but I couldn`t keep the schedule .

>>> I needed to work a lot on it but I couldn\'t keep up with the tight schedule.

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