Wednesday homework
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK:
Can you tell me about the most important lesson you\'ve learnt in life so far?
In the 2019 summer vacation, I went to the Philippines to have an English camp to improve my English skills.
There were a lot of elder people and a younger girl.
I don\'t have any same-aged friends there.
Although elder girls took care of me and that younger girl a lot.
So there weren\'t lots of problems in the beginning.
All elder girls took care of me a lot but an exactly elder girl named Ann took care of me better than others.
The new girl\'s name Candis came and join the camp.
I wanted to be nearer to her.
So I played with her a lot.
And next to the girl Ann was very mad at me the next day.
She was kind of hurt because I only played with my new sister Candis.
So I apologized to Ann and she accepted but not truly accepted.
She ignored me after that.
She has a fault but I also have a fault.
What I learned from this situation was to be harmonized with everyone not only a particular person.
강사 첨삭
Hello Claire!
Thanks for the efforts today! See you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
>>In the 2019 summer vacation, I went to the Philippines to attend an English camp to improve my English skills.
There were a lot of elder people and a younger girl.
There were a lot of elder people and a younger girl.
>>CORRECT!
I don\'t have any same-aged friends there.
I don\'t have any same-aged friends there.
>>I didn\'t have any same-aged friends there.
Although elder girls took care of me and that younger girl a lot.
Although elder girls took care of me and that younger girl a lot.
>>CORRECT!
So there weren\'t lots of problems in the beginning.
>>CORRECT!
All elder girls took care of me a lot but an exactly elder girl named Ann took care of me better than others.
All elder girls took care of me a lot but an exactly elder girl named Ann took care of me better than others.
>>All the elder girls took care of me a lot but one girl named Ann took care of me better than the others.
The new girl\'s name Candis came and join the camp.
The new girl\'s name Candis came and join the camp.
>>The new girl, Candis, came and join the camp.
I wanted to be nearer to her.
I wanted to be nearer to her.
>>I wanted to be closer to her.
So I played with her a lot.
So I played with her a lot.
>>CORRECT!
And next to the girl Ann was very mad at me the next day.
And next to the girl Ann was very mad at me the next day.
>>The next day, Ann was very angry with me.
She was kind of hurt because I only played with my new sister Candis.
She was kind of hurt because I only played with my new sister Candis.
>>CORRECT!
So I apologized to Ann and she accepted but not truly accepted.
So I apologized to Ann and she accepted but not truly accepted.
>>So I apologized to Ann and she accepted my apology but not sincerely.
She ignored me after that.
She ignored me after that.
>>CORRECT!
She has a fault but I also have a fault.
She has a fault but I also have a fault.
>>CORRECT!
What I learned from this situation was to be harmonized with everyone not only a particular person.
What I learned from this situation was to be harmonized with everyone not only a particular person.
>>What I learned from this situation was to get along well with everyone, not only a particular person.
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