What activities in your school do you like the most and why?
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I used to say that I wanted to be a wizard before I went to school. I cannot remember why I did that, but I might want to get a lot of toys and cookies, and I might have thought I could make them by myself, without nagging my mother. 
After I entered elementary school, I realized that the wizard is not real, and I thought that it would be better to be a scientist who can create everything I want.
Several years later, though I could know that having much money is much better than creating my wannabe things, I still liked learning science. A lot of difficult theories and formulas could not let me get some visible things, but made me know the secrets of the world. I felt that I learnt kind of spells to explain how the world operates and to expect how this changes.
Nonetheless, in my university, I finally realized that these spells are too profound to understand with my ability, so I had to give up my dream and just got a job right after my graduation.
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I used to say that I wanted to be a wizard before I went to school.
>>CORRECT!
I cannot remember why I did that, but I might want to get a lot of toys and cookies, and I might have thought I could make them by myself, without nagging my mother. 
>>I cannot remember why I did that, but I might want to get a lot of toys and cookies, and I might have thought I could make them by myself, without my mother nagging.
After I entered elementary school, I realized that the wizard is not real, and I thought that it would be better to be a scientist who can create everything I want.
>>CORRECT!
Several years later, though I could know that having much money is much better than creating my wannabe things, I still liked learning science.
>>CORRECT!
A lot of difficult theories and formulas could not let me get some visible things, but made me know the secrets of the world.
>>CORRECT!
I felt that I learnt kind of spells to explain how the world operates and to expect how this changes.
>>CORRECT!
Nonetheless, in my university, I finally realized that these spells are too profound to understand with my ability, so I had to give up my dream and just got a job right after my graduation.
>>CORRECT!
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