What advice can you give to people who are depressed? Do you think ordinary people can help the depr
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Above all, One of the reasons why people are depressed is to compare themselves with others. As the old saying goes, don\'t compare your life with others. There\'s no comparison between the sun and the moon. They shine when it\'s their time. So my advice is that each person has a respective time and purpose that you need not be conscious about others. Rather, you need to know yourself and your Creator more and more. Otherwise, we can\'t help but make a mistake barking up the wrong tree.
Therefore, if you\'re walking your own way, you\'re eligible to make proper advice to those struggling with depression because many mental illnesses such as depression may come from self-depreciation. However, if you\'re one of those who can feel relieved to see yourself above others, you can\'t be helpful to anyone, let alone yourself. More spiritually saying, I believe there is a wicked existence over people. So if you can\'t come to your senses for a while, you will soon find yourself way off the happiness.
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Hello Steve,
This composition was great! You just have to pay attention to your consistency as we are talking from a third person\'s point of view.
Other than that, this composition is already great and very meaningful. Great job!
~T. Demi
Above all, One of the reasons why people are depressed is to compare themselves with others.
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OR>> Above all, One of the reasons why people are depressed is because they compare themselves with others.
As the old saying goes, don\'t compare your life with others.
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There\'s no comparison between the sun and the moon.
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They shine when it\'s their time.
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So my advice is that each person has a respective time and purpose that you need not be conscious about others.
>> So my advice is that each person should remember that they have their own respective time and purpose, they shouldn\'t be conscious about others.
Rather, you need to know yourself and your Creator more and more.
>> Rather, they need to know much more about themselves and their Creator.
Otherwise, we can\'t help but make a mistake barking up the wrong tree.
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OR>> Otherwise, it\'s inevitable that they will make a mistake barking up the wrong tree.
Therefore, if you\'re walking your way, you\'re eligible to make proper advice to those struggling with depression because many mental illnesses such as depression may come from self-depreciation.
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OR>>Therefore, if people are walking their own ways, then they\'re eligible to make proper advice to those struggling with depression because many mental illnesses such as depression may come from self-depreciation.
However, if you\'re one of those who can feel relieved to see yourself above others, you can\'t be helpful to anyone, let alone yourself. More spiritually saying, I believe there is a wicked existence over people.
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OR >>However, if they\'re one of those who are relieved to see themselves above others, they can\'t be helpful to anyone, let alone themselves. More spiritually saying, I believe there is a wicked existence over people.
So if you can\'t come to your senses for a while, you will soon find yourself way off the happiness.
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OR>> So if they can\'t come to their senses for a while, they will soon find themselves drifting away from happiness.
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