What advice would you give to today\'s adolescents?
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These days, many students are addicted to smartphones, so they don\'t want to talk with their parents. This is serious problem we are facing, because children don\'t know how to communicate with people. they would like to stay at home watching Youtube or using a computer at all the time. They should learn socializing by meeting their close friends. I want them to read books at least once every two month. Because they can be taught about communicating skills and useful expressions by reading books. As become an adult, I think that millennial generation people seem like be selfish, too competent and have Me First attitude at work. I want them to be more sociable. I sometimes feel so sorry, when they don\'t care people around them. We can\'t not live alone, we should have a relationship with people.
I know that each generation has a specific traits according to society change. However, We are living with every different persons, so we have to care and consider our others.
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These days, many students are addicted to smartphones, so they don\'t want to talk with their parents.
>>correct
This is serious problem we are facing, because children don\'t know how to communicate with people.
>>This is a serious problem we are facing because children don\'t know how to communicate with people.
They would like to stay at home watching Youtube or using a computer all the time.
>>correct
They should learn socializing by meeting their close friends.
>>They should learn to socialize by meeting their close friends.
I want them to read books at least once every two month.
>>I want them to read books at least once every two months.
Because they can be taught about communicating skills and useful expressions by reading books.
>>Because they will learn how to develop their communication skills and they will also learn useful expressions by reading books.
As become an adult, I think that millennial generation people seem like be selfish, too competent and have Me First attitude at work.
>>As people become adults, I think that millennial generation seem to be selfish and too competitive at work.
I want them to be more sociable.
>>correct
I sometimes feel so sorry, when they don\'t care people around them.
>>I sometimes feel sorry when they don\'t care about the people around them.
We can\'t not live alone, we should have a relationship with people.
>>We can\'t live alone. We should learn to build a good relationship with other people.
I know that each generation has a specific traits according to society change.
>>correct
However, we are living with every different persons, so we have to care and consider our others.
>>However, we are living with different personalities so we have to care and consider others.
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