What amusement parks do you recomend?

2014-05-07 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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There are only two big amusement parks in Korea: Everland and Seoul Land. Everland is much larger than Seoul Land, but it is located farther from Seoul, so it takes longer to get there. Seoul Land is located in the outskirt of Seoul, so it is more convenient and easier to visit. I went to Everland long time ago, so I do not have vivid memory of what kinds of roller coasters it has and how it layouts buildings and gardens. I have been to Seoul land several times. I visited there a few days ago to have fun with my daughter. Although we bought tickets for riding all the roller coasters, I did not ride any of them because I felt scared. When I was young, I was okay although I was not a big fan of riding roller coasters, but as getting aged, I feel more scared and dizzier. So I just watched my kid riding various roller coasters. I heard that Disneyland in the States is amazing. A lot of people say that it’s worth spending a couple of thousand dollars visiting there. I wish..

강사 첨삭

A fun-filled day to you Sir [이름]!

How are you doing today? I hope that you are having a great time at work.

Wow! I really want to visit those amusement parks. It is because I heard a lot of things from my students.

Oh yes! You are right, a lot of people are telling that Disneyland is a great place to visit.

How about the Disneyland in Hong Kong? Did you hear marvelous stories about it?
We can talk about it later in class. See you! I wish to go to Korea someday.%%

Teacher Nina

 

There are only two big amusement parks in Korea: Everland and Seoul Land.

>> Correct

Everland is much larger than Seoul Land, but it is located farther from Seoul, so it takes longer to get there.

>> Everland is much larger than Seoul Land, but it is located farther from Seoul, so it takes a longer time to get there.

Seoul Land is located in the outskirt of Seoul, so it is more convenient and easier to visit.

>> Correct

I went to Everland long time ago, so I do not have vivid memory of what kinds of roller coasters it has and how it layouts buildings and gardens.

>> Did you mean: I went to Ever land long time ago, so I do not have a vivid memory of what kinds of roller coasters it has and how its layouts buildings and gardens look like.

I have been to Seoul land several times.

>> Correct

I visited there a few days ago to have fun with my daughter.

>> Correct

Although we bought tickets for riding all the roller coasters, I did not ride any of them because I felt scared.

>> Correct

When I was young, I was okay although I was not a big fan of riding roller coasters, but as getting aged, I feel more scared and dizzier.

>> Correct

>> OR: When I was young, I was okay although I was not a big fan of riding roller coasters, but as getting older, I feel more scared and dizzier.

So I just watched my kid riding various roller coasters.

>> Correct

I heard that Disneyland in the States is amazing.

>> Correct

A lot of people say that it’s worth spending a couple of thousand dollars visiting there.

>> Correct

I wish..

>> Correct

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