What an amazing kid!

2010-09-09 · 첨삭 강사 janel

학생이 쓴 원문

Today, on the TV show I saw a kid who makes delicious food. I was really surprised about that show!! He was really good at making a Sushi. Also, he could make diffrent type of Sushi. Even some people was more surprised, because his Sushi was really delicious. I really want to try it that how it's delicious. One day, he made lots of Sushi for his friends. Ofcourse they loved the taste of his Sushi. Like this, I learn that some people have a ability for their own. Maybe I have my own ability, I hope I can find it soon.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Wow! He does sound amazing.  Don't worry, you will tap into you talents as you grow.-Teacher JM   Today, on the TV show I saw a kid who makes delicious food. >>>Today, on a TV show, I saw a kid who makes delicious food.I was really surprised about that show!! >>>CorrectHe was really good at making a Sushi. >>>He was really good at making Sushi.Also, he could make diffrent type of Sushi. >>>Also, he could make different types of Sushi. Even some people was more surprised, because his Sushi was really delicious. >>>Even some people were more surprised because his Sushi was really delicious.I really want to try it that how it's delicious. >>>I really want to try it for myself so that I would know how delicious it is.One day, he made lots of Sushi for his friends. >>>One day, he made lots of Sushis for his friends.Ofcourse they loved the taste of his Sushi. >>>Of course they loved the taste of his Sushi.Like this, I learn that some people have a ability for their own. >>>Like this, I learned that some people have an ability of their own.Maybe I have my own ability, I hope I can find it soon. >>>Maybe I have my own ability too; I hope I can tap into it soon.

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