What animal best represents you?

2021-12-27 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

A horse can represent me. When I was younger than now. I belonged a soccer team. I love running from that time. While I am running, I can clear my head. Even if I got exhausted, running make me refresh. I can\'t run as fast as that time, but I try to keep my body condition to run. I want to run as like a horse on a field.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]ny! :)
Thank you for writing this essay. 
I could sense how running made you feel free and happy. The horse is known for it\'s strength, agility and speed. :)
Anyhow,  I hope you\'re having a great evening. 
See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

A horse can represent me. 
>> CORRECT!
When I was younger than now. I belonged a soccer team. 
>> In my younger days, I belonged to a soccer team. 
I love running from that time. 
>> I loved running at that time.
While I am running, I can clear my head.
>> While I was running, I was able to clear my head. 
Even if I got exhausted, running make me refresh. 
>> Even if I got exhausted, running refreshed me. 
I can\'t run as fast as that time, but I try to keep my body condition to run. 
>> I can\'t run as fast now but I try to keep my body condition for running. 
I want to run as like a horse on a field.
>> I want to run like a horse on a field.

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