What are good and bad points of using computers?

2019-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 May

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Hi May! My school schdule is set. I have class at 9 on Monday and Wednesday. So I think friday\'s talking was our last. I\'m happy to talk with you. If can, see you next time. Bye :) ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Good point of using computers is searching. We can search simply by using computers if we want to know something. However, using computers makes our eyes bad and our body has forward head posture. It also trigger internet addction.

강사 첨삭

Good morning [이름]! It was a great time having a class with you. And I hope to talk to you again next time.

Good luck in all of your classes! ^^

~~Teacher May~~

Good point of using computers is searching.

>> The good point of using computers is searching information.

We can search simply by using computers if we want to know something.

>> CORRECT

OR >> We can search simply anything we want to know using computers.

However, using computers makes our eyes bad and our body has forward head posture.

>> However, using computers makes us to have bad eyesight and our body bends forward.

It also trigger internet addction.

>> CORRECT

OR >> It can also lead to addiction.

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