What are other mind games inSouth korea
학생이 쓴 원문
We feel a sence of accomplishment in video games. And get rid of stress in daliy. Nowadays, there are some international video games. Such as switch game. And you make internatinal friends in video games. So you can know more about other country culture. But excessive game as an escape from reality and risk of gaming addiction. So we make an effort to play games at a reasonable hour.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Hyeo [이름]!
While it is true that there are games that help us relax, there are also games that are harmful for our mental health. We have to make smart choices in choosing games and online content to enrich our lives.
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Study the underlined word/s and learn the correct patterns.
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-T. Donna~
>> We feel a sense of accomplishment in video games. Moreover, we get rid of stress in our daily lives. Nowadays, there are some international video games. Such as Switch Game. And you make international friends in video games. So you can know more about other country\'s culture. But excessive game as an escape from reality leads to risk of gaming addiction. So we make an effort to play games at a reasonable hour.
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