What are possible reasons people end up committing murder crimes? Is it an inborn trait to be a murd
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>>> OR: There are two contrasting theories: the “Good Nature Principle” and the “Evil Nature Principle.”
The former indicates that human nature is fundamentally good, and latter emphasizes the opposite.
>>> The former suggests that human nature is fundamentally good, while the latter argues the opposite.
In my opinion, there are no humans born evil, but their personalities are facilitated by surrounding environment.
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>>> OR: In my opinion, no humans are born evil; rather, their personalities are shaped by their surrounding environment.
Indeed, there are some cases of inborn mental issues causing sociopathic or psychopathic behavior, but I believe this is extremely rare and these traits can be controlled or weaken from surrounding environment.
>>> OR: Indeed, there are some cases in which inborn mental conditions lead to sociopathic or psychopathic behavior, but I believe such cases are extremely rare, and these traits can be controlled or weakened by environmental factors.
However, I saw many crime cases where criminals’ early childhood experience influences their behavior especially though parents and guardians.
>>> Furthermore, I have seen many crime cases in which criminals’ early childhood experiences strongly influenced their behavior, especially through their parents or guardians.
For instance, Ghislaine Maxwell was abused by his father when she was young and surrounded by the adults who were openly commercialize sex.
>>> For instance, Ghislaine Maxwell was abused by her father when she was young and was surrounded by adults who openly commercialized sex.
It was not evident in the documentary, but I believe this experience had grave impact on her and led her commit a sex crime to young girls without any hesitation.
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