What are some good points about social networking? What are some bad points about social networking?
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I can more contact with my friends through social networking.
And I can also see pictures of my favorite entertainers through it.
But if I spend too much time on using social networking, I may be cell phone addicts.
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I can more contact with my friends through social networking.
>> I can contact my friends more through social networking.
And I can also see pictures of my favorite entertainers through it.
>> CORRECT!
But if I spend too much time on using social networking, I may be cell phone addicts.
>> But if I spend too much time using social networking, I may be a cell phone addict.
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