What are some good points and bad points about social networking?

2018-05-07 · 첨삭 강사 May

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Like many other thing in this world, social networking has its pros and cons. While some of them are controversial and some of them are obvious, it's important to go back and think about those things from time to time. #Upside. 1. It motivates people to read news. 2. It helps people communicate more conveniently. #Downside. 1. It spreads false news. - I don't think SN is the only reason why there's false news. It's due to people's gullibility. However, SN did make it a huge and instant. 2. Constant connectivity distracts people. - It's one thing to say that SN enable us to connect with people all around the globe, it's another that constant connection can distracts us. 3. Some Privacy issue. - Throughout the history of mankind, many people afraid large origination might collect our data and use them to their heart's content. But they didn't expect the future where people willingly post their personally information on public. And Recent facebook scandal clearly indicates its danger

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]. We will not see each other today. I hope that you will have a good day today.

Thanks for answering the question. I know that we have already discussed that a few weeks ago.

Just wanted to test your writing skill. Well, you have the skill. You have a good foundation of vocabulary.

However, there are still some grammar errors that you must take note of but they are very minimal.

Some words are also missing in your sentence structures. I capitalized those words.

Hope to see you tomorrow and looking forward for more productive conversations. ^^

~~May~~

Like many other thing in this world, social networking has its pros and cons. While some of them are controversial and some of them are obvious, it\'s important to go back and think about those things from time to time.

>> Like many other THINGS in this world...
#Upside.
1. It motivates people to read news.
2. It helps people communicate more conveniently.

>> It helps people TO communicate more conveniently.
#Downside.
1. It spreads false news. - I don\'t think SN is the only reason why there\'s false news. It\'s due to people\'s gullibility. However, SN did make it a huge and instant.
2. Constant connectivity distracts people. - It\'s one thing to say that SN enable us to connect with people all around the globe, it\'s another that constant connection can distracts us. 

>> SN ENABLES us to connect with people all around the globe, however, constant connection can DISTRACT us.  
3. Some Privacy issue. - Throughout the history of mankind, many people afraid large origination might collect our data and use them to their heart\'s content. But they didn\'t expect the future where people willingly post their personally information on public. And Recent facebook scandal clearly indicates its danger

>> Throughout the history of mankind, many people ARE afraid OF large origination THAT might collect our data and use them to their heart\'s content. But they didn\'t expect the future where people willingly post their PERSONAL information on public. Recent Facebook scandal clearly indicates its danger.

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