What are some good points and bad points about social networking?
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Thank you for the time in doing this homework [이름]! ^^
You are right. Social networking has lots of disadvantages that\'s why
I don\'t really expose myself on social media. However, the good points
of using this are some things that we can enjoy and are helpful ^^
~~Teacher May~~
I believe there are a lot of benefits about social networking.
>> I believe that here are a lot of benefits of social networking.
Firstly, we can contact with friends easily.
>> Firstly, we can contact our friends easily.
In the past, we can only use a letter for communicating.
>> In the past, we could only send /write letters for communicating.
After inventing the internet , we can send a message more conveniently.
>> Since internet had risen, we can now send a message more conveniently.
Secondly, it\'s so fast and even we know whether they take it or not.
>> Secondly, it\'s so fast and we can even know if they took it or not.
The last advantage is that it\'s easy to meet a new friend.
>> CORRECT
However, this advance also has bad points.
>> However, this advantage also has bad points.
First of all, meeting someone new can be menaced.
>> Meeting someone new can be a menace.
It often uses as dangerous way like criminal things.
>> It is often used for crimes.
It can also lead them to you by searching in the network system and then that can be very serious happen to you.
>> They can access your personal information and that could lead a serious problem in your part.
I think that every invention have both advantages and disadvantages.
>> I think that every invention has both advantages and disadvantages.
The most important thing is how we use it wisely.
>> CORRECT
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