What are some good points and bad points about social networking?

2019-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 May

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I believe there are a lot of benefits about social networking. Firstly, we can contact with friends easily. In the past, we can only use a letter for communicating. After inventing the internet , we can send a message more conveniently. Secondly, it\'s so fast and even we know whether they take it or not. The last advantage is that it\'s easy to meet a new friend. However, this advance also has bad points. First of all, meeting someone new can be menaced. It often uses as dangerous way like criminal things. It can also lead them to you by searching in the network system and then that can be very serious happen to you. I think that every invention have both advantages and disadvantages. The most important thing is how we use it wisely.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for the time in doing this homework [이름]! ^^

You are right. Social networking has lots of disadvantages that\'s why

I don\'t really expose myself on social media. However, the good points

of using this are some things that we can enjoy and are helpful ^^

~~Teacher May~~

I believe there are a lot of benefits about social networking.

>> I believe that here are a lot of benefits of social networking.
Firstly, we can contact with friends easily.

>> Firstly, we can contact our friends easily.

In the past, we can only use a letter for communicating.

>> In the past, we could only send /write letters for communicating.

After inventing the internet , we can send a message more conveniently.

>> Since internet had risen, we can now send a message more conveniently.

Secondly, it\'s so fast and even we know whether they take it or not.

>> Secondly, it\'s so fast and we can even know if they took it or not.

The last advantage is that it\'s easy to meet a new friend.

>> CORRECT
 However, this advance also has bad points.

>>  However, this advantage also has bad points.

First of all, meeting someone new can be menaced.

>> Meeting someone new can be a menace.

It often uses as dangerous way like criminal things.

>> It is often used for crimes.

It can also lead them to you by searching in the network system and then that can be very serious happen to you.

>> They can access your personal information and that could lead a serious problem in your part.

I think that every invention have both advantages and disadvantages.

>> I think that every invention has both advantages and disadvantages.

The most important thing is how we use it wisely.

>> CORRECT

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