What are some in-demand occupations in your country?
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A high-demand job typically means that there will be more jobs available over the next several years. In previous decade, a scientist, a lawer and a doctor was the most popular jobs. A teacher used to ask what students dream is and what they would like to become when they become an adult. Most students answered that they wanted to be a president, the owner of computer game and a scientist. Those are little bit extra ordinary things because they didn\'t know how difficult getting such jobs is. In other hands, students dream to be a video creator the most followed by a celebrity, a IT engineer, because it looks cool and looks like making a lot of money than other occupations. In reality, however, job seekers want to be a public servant, a police officer and a fire fighter because those jobs are stable to keep a position and have a better pension after the retirement. Companies have a difficulties to hire IT engineers due to extend of their business. I believe that jobs related with IT wi
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~ T. CamilleA high-demand job typically means that there will be more jobs available over the next several years.
>> CORRECT! In previous decade, a scientist, a lawer and a doctor was the most popular jobs.
>> In the previous decades, scientists, lawyers, and doctors were the most popular jobs.
A teacher used to ask what students dream is and what they would like to become when they become an adult.
>> A teacher used to ask what a student\'s dream is and what they would like to become when they become an adult.
Most students answered that they wanted to be a president, the owner of computer game and a scientist.
>> Most students answered that they wanted to be a president, the owner of computer game company, and a scientist.
Those are little bit extra ordinary things because they didn\'t know how difficult getting such jobs is.
>> CORRECT! In other hands, students dream to be a video creator the most followed by a celebrity, a IT engineer, because it looks cool and looks like making a lot of money than other occupations.
>> On the other hand, students dream to be a video creator the most, followed by a celebrity, and an IT engineer, because it looks cool and makes a lot of money than other occupations.
In reality, however, job seekers want to be a public servant, a police officer and a fire fighter because those jobs are stable to keep a position and have a better pension after the retirement.
>> CORRECT!
Companies have a difficulties to hire IT engineers due to extend of their business.
>> Companies have difficulties to hire IT engineers due to the extending of their business.
I believe that jobs related with IT wi
>> I believe that jobs related with IT will continuously boom, even in a few years from now.
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