What are some of the negative effects of alcohol?
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There are so many negative effects of alcohol. First, Alcohol makes your brain to be old quickly. Our brain needs a lots of waters, but alcohol takes waters from brains. Second, I have too much foods while drinking alcohol. So, I have worried obesity. Third, If I drink too much alcohol, I suffer hangover. I have known things of negative effects of alcohol, but I don\'t know that why I drink alcohol a lot.
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There are so many negative effects of alcohol.
>> CORRECT!First, Alcohol makes your brain to be old quickly.
>> CORRECT!Our brain needs a lots of waters, but alcohol takes waters from brains.
>> Our brain needs a lot of water, but alcohol takes the water from our brains. OR >> Our brain needs enough water, but alcohol takes the water from our brains.
Second, I have too much foods while drinking alcohol.
>> Second, I have too much food while drinking alcohol. OR >> Second, I eat too much food while drinking alcohol.
So, I have worried obesity.
>> So, I am worried about obesity.
Third, If I drink too much alcohol, I suffer hangover.
>> Third, If I drink too much alcohol, I suffer from hangover. I have known things of negative effects of alcohol, but I don\'t know that why I drink alcohol a lot.
>> I have known things of negative effects of alcohol, but I don\'t know why I drink alcohol a lot.
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