What are some other reasons that people work?

The reason of working is various depending on person. In my case, sense of accomplishment or achievement is more important reason why I do my job. When I just start working, I also concentrate on how much I can earn, but how many I earned, I couldn't satisfy with my earning. I was getting greedy and embraced endless desire for money. The result of this thinking, I loose my healthy. Since my condition getting worse, I can change my thought. Even though I can't earn a lot of money, I'm able to concentrate on my work than past, also it makes me more happier. I believe if I think my work is more valuable to my life and society, I can feel proud of my job, and it is naturally bring more money ans success.

Hi [이름]! ^^   Good work on expressing your views about the composition topic. ^^ Yorur point came across quite clearly and most of the corrections made were to help the fluentness of it. ^^ Although, try not to use a word repeatedly (like the word \"earn\") since this makes an essay or a speech tedious or monotonous to read or listen to; making use of a thesaurus would definitely help. ^^   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==     The reason of working is various depending on person. In my case, sense of accomplishment or achievement is more important reason why I do my job. >> The reason for working is varied depending on the person. In my case, the sense of accomplishment or achievement is why I work. When I just start working, I also concentrate on how much I can earn, but how many I earned, I couldn\'t satisfy with my earning. >> When I started working, I concentrated on how much I can earn but no matter how much I make, I could not be satisfied.   I was getting greedy and embraced endless desire for money. >> I got greedy and embraced an endless desire for money.   The result of this thinking, I loose my healthy. >> The result of this mentality was that I lost my health.   Since my condition getting worse, I can change my thought. >> When my condition worsened, I was able to change my mindset.   Even though I can\'t earn a lot of money, I\'m able to concentrate on my work than past, also it makes me more happier. >>Even though, I couldn\'t earn a lot, I\'m able to concentrate on my work compared to before and also, I am happier. I believe if I think my work is more valuable to my life and society, I can feel proud of my job, and it is naturally bring more money ans success. >> I believe that if my work holds value to my life and society, I can feel proud of what I do and it will naturally bring more money and success.