What are some problems that arise when students rely heavily on cram schools for college exam prepar
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From my personal experience, the most serious consequence is lacking independence after growing up. Since most students followed structured schedule where every resource was provided, it is challenging for them to navigate their own path after growing up. Most South Korean parents expect their children to become naturally independent after going to the college. And they suddenly stopped providing support which caused anxiety for students who followed the structured schedule. After going to universities, they suddenly need to prepare assignments and examinations by themselves. Also, there are no people that can seek advice. This kind of situation can exhaust the children and in worst case scenario they give up everything. For example, my brother used to be top-ranking students during high school but had issues in university where he needed to come up with schedule and study by himself. Accordingly, I believe students must learn to be independent to prevent above issues.
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Thank you for this, Aciel! Good luck there.
From my personal experience, the most serious consequence is lacking independence after growing up.
>>> correct
>>> OR: From my personal experience, the most serious consequence is a lack of independence after growing up.
Since most students followed structured schedule where every resource was provided, it is challenging for them to navigate their own path after growing up.
>>> OR: Since most students follow a highly structured schedule in which all resources are provided, it becomes challenging for them to navigate their own path as adults.
Most South Korean parents expect their children to become naturally independent after going to the college.
>>> correct
And they suddenly stopped providing support which caused anxiety for students who followed the structured schedule.
>>> correct
>>> OR: This sudden change can cause anxiety for students who are used to a structured environment.
After going to universities, they suddenly need to prepare assignments and examinations by themselves.
>>> correct
>>> OR: After entering university, students must prepare assignments and examinations on their own.
Also, there are no people that can seek advice.
>>> OR: In addition, there is often no one they can easily seek advice from.
This kind of situation can exhaust the children and in worst case scenario they give up everything.
>>> OR: This situation can exhaust students, and in the worst-case scenario, they may give up altogether.
For example, my brother used to be top-ranking students during high school but had issues in university where he needed to come up with schedule and study by himself.
>>> OR: For example, my brother used to be a top-ranking student in high school, but he struggled in university because he had to create his own schedule and study independently.
Accordingly, I believe students must learn to be independent to prevent above issues.
>>> correct
>>> OR: Accordingly, I believe students must learn to be independent in order to prevent these issues.
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