What are some problems that famous people have?

2015-06-10 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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The public are interested in and talk a lot about celebrities or famous people’s lives. Although their personal lives have nothing to do with ours, we often gossip about their affairs, fashions, dates, favorite food, etc. Their stories are one of top items that we talk over lunch or dinner with our friends and colleagues. They may have problems such as being unfriendly to their fans, arrogant, extravagant, and selfish. However, not all of them behave like that, and even an ordinary person including myself could be a real freak. So, we shouldn’t paint them all as they have more problems than us. Of course, there are things that famous people should be mindful of because they are not just ordinary citizens, but they are public figures whom young people admire and wish to follow. In that sense, they should set good examples themselves for other ordinary people. We often here from celebrities that they are also one of ordinary citizens and their personal lives should be protected.

강사 첨삭

Yahoo! It\'s hump day!

Happy Wednesday, Sir [이름]!

Who is your favorite Hollywood actor?
How about actress?
You can tell me about in class.

We should respect the personal lives of other people.

Of course, we can\'t avoid that there are times we talk about celebrities, friends, colleagues and so on.

But we should keep In mind that they should be respected.

As the saying goes, \" Respect begets respect\".

Thanks for your wonderful composition.
Talk to you soon

Teacher Nina

The public are interested in and talk a lot about celebrities or famous people’s lives.

>> correct

Although their personal lives have nothing to do with ours, we often gossip about their affairs, fashions, dates, favorite food, etc.

>> correct

Their stories are one of top items that we talk over lunch or dinner with our friends and colleagues.

>> Better: Their stories are one of the top items that we talk over lunch or dinner with our friends and colleagues.

They may have problems such as being unfriendly to their fans, arrogant, extravagant, and selfish.

>> correct

>> Better: They may have problems such as being unfriendly, arrogant, extravagant, and selfish to their fans.

However, not all of them behave like that, and even an ordinary person including myself could be a real freak.

>> correct

So, we shouldn’t paint them all as they have more problems than us.

>> correct

Of course, there are things that famous people should be mindful of because they are not just ordinary citizens, but they are public figures whom young people admire and wish to follow.

>> correct

>> OR: Of course, there are things that famous people should be mindful of. Because they are not just ordinary citizens, but they are public figures whom young people admire and wish to follow.

In that sense, they should set good examples themselves for other ordinary people.

>> correct

>> OR: In that sense, they should be a good example to ordinary people.

We often here from celebrities that they are also one of ordinary citizens and their personal lives should be protected.

>> correct

>> OR: We often here from celebrities that they are also one of the ordinary citizens and their personal lives should be protected.

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