What are some problems with corruption in the political system of your country?
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Hi Kim!
I hope that this trying moment of your country will be over soon. Don\'t lose ownership and control of your country. Always fight for what you believe in!
~Kelly^^
Actually, at this moment our country is in the middle of a big scandal.
>> Correct
and it is a corruption problem in political system of our country.
>> And it is because of the corruption problem in the political system of our country.
Our president is just a doll of another person.
>> Correct
Behind of our president, there is a woman who acts like president and makes instructions to her..
>> Behind our president is a woman who acts like the president and gives instructions to her..
So she asked for money from big companies like Samsung, Hyundai.
>> So, she asked for money from big companies like Samsung and Hyundai.
And she made her daughter enter a university using a power and money.
>> And she enrolled her daughter at a university using her power and money.
And there are lots of similar problems like doing illegal things using a power and money.
>> And there lots of similar problems that emerged involving money and power.
I think that because of it, we can\'t trust our government.
>> Correct.
>> or: I think that because of it, we can\'t trust our government anymore.
Therefore this time we need to show them our power and principle that our country made by us and we are the owner of our country .
>> Therefore, we need to show them people power, and be in control of our country.
Also we should make a strong law and strictly punish them.
>> Correct.
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