What are some things people can do to keep healthy?

2022-03-21 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

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I think the best ways to keep healthy are to have a healthy diet and to exercise on a regular basis. Firstly, health diet has including Fruits, vegetables, vitamins. non-health diet has including hamberger, chicken It can be lead to obesity. Secondly, we have to exercise on a regular basis. such as go to the gym, walk to the park. I think that our bodies need to rest. as well. If I do drink of water a lot. it can lead to healthy body. In conclusion, it is combination of both that creat a healthy lifestyle .

강사 첨삭

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- T. Rina

1. I think the best ways to keep healthy are to have a healthy diet and to exercise on a regular basis.
>> CORRECT!

2. Firstly, health diet has including Fruits, vegetables, vitamins.
>> Firstly, eating fruits and vegetables and taking some vitamins are included in a healthy diet.

3. non-health diet has including hamberger, chicken It can be lead to obesity.
>> Eating hamburger or chicken is unhealthy and it can lead to obesity.

4. Secondly, we have to exercise on a regular basis. such as go to the gym, walk to the park.
>> Secondly, we have to exercise on a regular basis, such as going to the gym or walking at the park.

5. I think that our bodies need to rest. as well.
>> CORRECT!

6. If I do drink of water a lot. it can lead to healthy body.
>> If I drink a lot of water, it can lead to a healthy body.
OR: Drinking a lot of water can help me have a healthy body. 

7. In conclusion, it is combination of both that creat a healthy lifestyle .
>> In conclusion, it is a combination of both that creates a healthy lifestyle.

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