What are some things that are legal that you personally think should be illegal?

2015-02-16 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Actually there are tons of things that should be illegal. Gambling, smoking, prostitution, abortion, and corporal punishment at school are some of those examples. It is ironic that many governments invest and directly run casinos in the name of providing people with entertainment and leisure. However, there are so many people who become the homeless, abandon their families, and ruin their life completely because of gambling. Some people even commit suicide. It is true that most governments spend a huge amount of money and energy on promoting stop-smoking and making a healthier society, but it is them who actually own and run the company that manufactures, markets and sells tobacco. They are taking twofold approaches. It is lawful for some countries like the US and the Philippines to possess a gun when meeting certain criteria. The consequence is that a thousand people are killed every day in the gun related crimes. It is quite obvious that the upside is bigger than the downside.

강사 첨삭

Terrific composition.

Gambling is really a big problem nowadays.

Like what you mentioned below, some people abandon their families or become homeless.

Actually, there are also people who were killed because of debts.

We should be really practical these days.

Instead of hoping that the government will do something for us.

We should start building our dreams or reaching our goals by doing good and being focused.

Thanks for your composition.

Teacher Nina


Actually there are tons of things that should be illegal.

>> correct

Gambling, smoking, prostitution, abortion, and corporal punishment at school are some of those examples.

>> correct

It is ironic that many governments invest and directly run casinos in the name of providing people with entertainment and leisure.

>> correct

However, there are so many people who become the homeless, abandon their families, and ruin their life completely because of gambling.

>> However, there are so many people who become homeless, abandon their families, and ruin their life completely because of gambling.

Some people even commit suicide.

>> correct

It is true that most governments spend a huge amount of money and energy on promoting stop-smoking and making a healthier society, but it is them who actually own and run the company that manufactures, markets and sells tobacco.

>> correct

They are taking twofold approaches.

>> correct

It is lawful for some countries like the US and the Philippines to possess a gun when meeting certain criteria.

>> correct

>> It is lawful for some countries like the U.S. and Philippines to possess a gun when meting a certain criteria.

The consequence is that a thousand people are killed every day in the gun related crimes.

>> correct

It is quite obvious that the upside is bigger than the downside.

>> correct

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