What are some things that make you happy?
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Happy Thursday, [이름]!
Thank you so much for doing your homework. We have a dog too. We treat her like a princess because she’s already part of our family. Tell me more about your dog next time!
-Kristine ^^
There are many things that make me happy in my
life.
>> There are many
things that make my life happy.
First of all, my pet who name is LEON.
>> First of all, my
pet’s name is Leon.
When he first came to my house, he was an abandoned dog.
>> He was an abandoned
dog when he first came to my house.
So, at first, he was really shy and didn’t eat or walk well.
>> At first, he
was really shy and wasn’t eating or walking well.
However, our family keep care of him with warm heart,
>> However, my family loves him and takes good care of him.
he became more energetic and outgoing dog.
>> He became more energetic and an outing dog.
So my dog is one of my happy things.
>> My dog is one
of the things that make me happy.
Second, my friends make me happy.
>> The second
thing that makes me happy, are my friends.
I really like meet and being with others.
>> I really like meeting
and hanging out with them.
So whenever I meet and communicate with my friends, I feel happy and have fun.
>> I feel great whenever
I talk to my friends.
Finally, delicious foods make me happy.
>> Finally,
delicious foods make me happy.
I think most people also think about that,
>> I think most people think that way too.
when people eat delicious foods or desserts, they relieve stress easily.
>> Eating
delicious foods or desserts can reduce your stress.
Especially in these days, my favorite food is chicken with beer.
>> I like eating
chicken while drinking beers these days.
The combination of chicken and beer is fantastic.
>> Correct.
So, my dog, friends and delicious foods make me happy in my life.
>> Therefore, my dog, my friends, and delicious foods make my life happy.
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