What are some topics that you can't stand to talk about? Why?
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I think the most sensitive topic is religion.
to have religion make our life more happy but sometime diffrence in some religion break out war. I saw news in TV about war between israel and palestine
I never had imagined that terrible thing. it should not break out. people kill each other by using terrible weapon. so I find the reason why do that people hate each other and kill taem. what I know about war is that they believe different god and it make for them to hate each other. religon argument is not worth and can’t be finished. so I think we understand our diffrence in our religion take that in our mind.
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Hi there^^
Thank you for doing your homework^^
Yes, I agree with you! It is a very sensitive topic and a lot of people argue about their religions.
But we should respect each other religion in that way, we will have a peaceful world.
Anyway, let\'s talk more about this in our class.
Have a great day and take care^^
~T.Chelsea
I think the most sensitive topic is religion.
>> CORRECT^^to have religion make our life more happy but sometime diffrence in some religion break out war.
>> Having religion make our life happried but sometimes the difference in some religions gives war.
I saw news in TV about war between israel and palestine
>> I saw news on TV about was between Israel and Palestine.I never had imagined that terrible thing.
>> I never imagined that it would be a terrible thing.
it should not break out.
>> It should not break out.
people kill each other by using terrible weapon.
>> People kill each other by using terrible weapons.
so I find the reason why do that people hate each other and kill taem.
>> So, I find the reason why people hate and kill each other.
what I know about war is that they believe different god and it make for them to hate each other.
>> What I know about the war is that they believe in a different God and it makes them hate each other.
religon argument is not worth and can’t be finished.
>> Religion argument is not worth it and cannot be finished.
so I think we understand our diffrence in our religion take that in our mind.
>> So, I think we should understand the differences of our religion and keep that in mind.
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