What are some ways you can do to help others in the community?
학생이 쓴 원문
There are so many ways to help others in our community.
Together with our neighbors, we can improve our society.
A big scale volunteer job could be a way to make a big output.
For instance, the citizens of Korea aided the disaster victims of flood last time.
Because the huge group of people cooperated hand in hand, and it made the great difference.
강사 첨삭
Hello there! Happy Wednesday, Sue!
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Thank you for answering your homework.
You had good ideas and I really appreciate your composition.
Putting the words disaster and flood that way makes the sentence redundant.
Also, we don\'t begin our sentences with \'because\'.
__Teacher Mayleen :)
There are so many ways to help others in our community.
>>> CORRECT
Together with our neighbors, we can improve our society.
Together with our neighbors, we can improve our society.
>>> CORRECT
A big scale volunteer job could be a way to make a big output.
A big scale volunteer job could be a way to make a big output.
>>> CORRECT
For instance, the citizens of Korea aided the disaster victims of flood last time.
For instance, the citizens of Korea aided the disaster victims of flood last time.
>>> For instance, the citizens of Korea aided the victims of flood last time.
Because the huge group of people cooperated hand in hand, and it made the great difference.
Because the huge group of people cooperated hand in hand, and it made the great difference.
>>> It made a great difference because a huge group of people cooperated hand in hand.
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