What are the 5 most important decisions in a person's life?

2015-07-15 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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The five most important decisions I made are as follows. Firstly, I entered technical high school in Seoul. I should have gone to general high school to enter college. Because of the decision, I had to spend a year on studying again to enter college after graduating from high school. Secondly, I gave up a job offered by the largest company in Korea a year after I started my career at the automobile company. I wanted to stay at the company. I was probably afraid of the change and the notoriously fierce competition and hard work at the new company. Where I am and what I work for now could have changed a lot if I had chosen to work the new company. Thirdly, starting and finishing my MBA was a big decision. Fourthly, preparing for, passing and getting a CPA license was an important decision I made. Lastly, buying a house was a historical event in my personal life in terms of building my financial healthiness. I sometimes think about what if I had made a different decision at that time.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sir [이름]!

Happy Wednesday.
Thank you so much for your time.

And of course for sharing those five important decisions you made.

I appreciate that you share those personal matters with me.

I am so blessed to have a good and understanding student like you.

All I can say is that, you are a strong and determined person.

You don\'t stop working hard or doing something to reach your goal. Keep it up!

Take care. See you in class.

Teacher Nina


The five most important decisions I made are as follows.

>> The five most important decisions I made are as follows:

Firstly, I entered technical high school in Seoul.

>> correct

I should have gone to general high school to enter college.

>> correct

Because of the decision, I had to spend a year on studying again to enter college after graduating from high school.

>> Because of that decision, I had to spend year on studying again to enter college after graduating from high school.

Secondly, I gave up a job offered by the largest company in Korea a year after I started my career at the automobile company.

>> correct

I wanted to stay at the company. 

>> correct

I was probably afraid of the change and the notoriously fierce competition and hard work at the new company.

>> I was probably afraid of the change, the notoriously fierce competition and hard work at the new company.

Where I am and what I work for now could have changed a lot if I had chosen to work the new company.

>> Better: Where I am and what I work for now could have changed a lot if I had chosen to work there.

Thirdly, starting and finishing my MBA was a big decision.

>> correct

Fourthly, preparing for, passing and getting a CPA license was an important decision I made.

>> correct

Lastly, buying a house was a historical event in my personal life in terms of building my financial healthiness.

>> Better: Lastly, buying a house was a historical event in my personal life in terms of building my financial health.

I sometimes think about what if I had made a different decision at that time.

>> correct

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