What are the advantages and disadvantages of being rich?

2024-07-08 · 첨삭 강사 Ryka

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I think that being a rich has more advantages than disadvantages. If we become a rich, we can have a freedom from the money. It\'s a big advantage for our lives. However, If I were a rich, I would have more pressure and concernes for the life. because rich have too much asset.

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~~Teacher Ryka^^

I think that being a rich has more advantages than disadvantages.
>> I think that being rich has more advantages than disadvantages. 

If we become a rich, we can have a freedom from the money.
>> If we become rich, we can have freedom from money concerns. 

It\'s a big advantage for our lives.
>> CORRECT
>> OR It\'s a significant benefit for our lives. 

However, If I were a rich, I would have more pressure and concernes for the life. because rich have too much asset.
>> However, if I were rich, I would have more pressure and concerns because the rich have too many assets.

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