What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity in different countries? -2
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On the flip side, it is undeniable that there are some downsides when the same industry grows. Especially, the environment issues will be generated. Primarily, locals who live in the center of tourism spot would suffer from noise as famous attractions are vibrant regardless of day and time. Also, more tourism places are full of trash thrown away by visitors. To exemplify, a well-known island in the Philippine had been lock-down for about one year in order to clean the whole garbage tourists had left. In light of the above, drawbacks of traveling in foreign countries should be regarded.
In conclusion, it is obvious that there are a variety of opinions about an increase in tours in other nations. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded each side of debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity in different countries? -2
On the flip side, it is undeniable that there are some downsides when the same industry grows.
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or>>On the other hand, it is irrefutable that there are some negative sides when the same field of the industry will flourish.
Especially, the environment issues will be generated.
>>It will especially generate some environmental issues.
Primarily, locals who live in the center of tourism spot would suffer from noise as famous attractions are vibrant regardless of day and time.
>>Primarily, the locals who live in the center of a tourist spot would suffer from noise, as most famous sites are vibrant regardless of the time and day.
Also, more tourism places are full of trash thrown away by visitors.
Also, more tourism places are full of trash thrown away by visitors.
To exemplify, a well-known island in the Philippine had been lock-down for about one year in order to clean the whole garbage tourists had left.
>>To exemplify, a well-known island in the Philippines went on a lock-down for about one year in order to clean the garbage that the tourists left.
In light of the above, drawbacks of traveling in foreign countries should be regarded.
CORRECT!
CORRECT!
or>>In light of the above information, some drawbacks of traveling in foreign countries should be regarded with more care.
In conclusion, it is obvious that there are a variety of opinions about an increase in tours in other nations.
In conclusion, it is obvious that there are a variety of opinions about an increase in tours in other nations.
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or>>To conclude, it is very much obvious that there are a variety of opinions about the increase of tourists all over the world.
However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded each side of debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
>>However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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