What are the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping?
학생이 쓴 원문
As developing information technology, we can contact many things easily on the internet. Thus, people who use internet shopping increase more and more because time and convenience is more important now.
Internet shopping has a lot of advantages. First, we don’t need to go to shopping mall anymore. It help ours to save our time to go there.
Also, we don’t need to carry heavy things ourselves. If we order something, it will be deliver our home with in 7 days at least, and even we can receive it in one day.
Furthermore, we can compare to price and feature of something which want to buy easily through searching the internet at home.
However, online shopping have a risk about fraud. Some people cheat buyers as uploading fake pictures or delivering other products because we can’t see and touch sometimes directly. Thus, we should be careful more when we do online shopping. For example, use reliable web site and confirm review of products before you buy it.
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As developing information technology, we can contact many things easily on the internet.
>>CORRECT!
Thus, people who use internet shopping increase more and more because time and convenience is more important now.
>>CORRECT!
Internet shopping has a lot of advantages.
>>CORRECT!
Internet shopping has a lot of advantages.
>>CORRECT!
First, we don’t need to go to shopping mall anymore.
>>CORRECT!
It help ours to save our time to go there.
>>It helps us to save time going there.
Also, we don’t need to carry heavy things ourselves.
>>It helps us to save time going there.
Also, we don’t need to carry heavy things ourselves.
>>CORRECT!
If we order something, it will be deliver our home with in 7 days at least, and even we can receive it in one day.
>>If we order something, it will be delivered at home with in 7 days and we can even recieved it in one day.
Furthermore, we can compare to price and feature of something which want to buy easily through searching the internet at home.
>>Furthermore, we can compare the prices and features of something which is easily bought through searching the internet at home.
However, online shopping have a risk about fraud.
Furthermore, we can compare to price and feature of something which want to buy easily through searching the internet at home.
>>Furthermore, we can compare the prices and features of something which is easily bought through searching the internet at home.
However, online shopping have a risk about fraud.
>>CORRECT!
Some people cheat buyers as uploading fake pictures or delivering other products because we can’t see and touch sometimes directly.
>>CORRECT!
Thus, we should be careful more when we do online shopping.
>>Thus, we should be more careful when we do online shopping.
For example, use reliable web site and confirm review of products before you buy it.
>>CORRECT!
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