What are the advantages and/or disadvantages of reducing the working week to thirty hours?

2015-05-27 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Unemployment rate has been gradually increased in Korea, especially the youth emoloyment rate is very high. Most young people want to work at company, but it hesitates to hire them. I think that this is a big problem. If government made a legislation that companies reduce the working time of their employees by thirty hours, what would happen? There must be pros and cons. As to the advantages, companies should hire more employees, which makes unemoloyment rate lower. In addition, because of short working time, employees could use the time developing their skills or relaxing. On the other hand, as for the disadvantages, it costs so much to hire many employees; therefore, companies might be bankrupt or would rise their product's prices to make up their losses in cost. Besides, welfare companies provide would be reduced because of shortage of money. I believe that unemployment problem is picky to solve. Nevertheless, government should try to relive this problem.

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Hello Miss [이름]! Thank you for sharing your thoughts about the essay. I also hope that unemployment problem should be solved so that everybody can have an opportunity to have a good life. ~Kelly^^ Unemployment rate has been gradually increased in Korea, especially the youth emoloyment rate is very high. >> Unemployment rate has been gradually increased in Korea, especially the youth unemployment. Most young people want to work at company, but it hesitates to hire them. >> Most young people want to work in companies, but employers hesitate to hire them. I think that this is a big problem. >> Correct.If government made a legislation that companies reduce the working time of their employees by thirty hours, what would happen? >> If the government made a legislation for companies to reduce the working time of their employees by thirty hours, what would happen? There must be pros and cons. >> There would be pros and cons. As to the advantages, companies should hire more employees, which makes unemoloyment rate lower. >> As to the advantages, companies will hire more employees, which makes the unemoloyment rate lower. In addition, because of short working time, employees could use the time developing their skills or relaxing. >> In addition, because of short working time, employees could use their spare time developing their skills or relaxing. On the other hand, as for the disadvantages, it costs so much to hire many employees; therefore, companies might be bankrupt or would rise their product\'s prices to make up their losses in cost. >> As for the disadvantages, it costs so much to hire many employees; therefore, companies might be bankrupt or would rise their product\'s prices to make up for their losses.  Besides, welfare companies provide would be reduced because of shortage of money. >> Besides the benefits that employees receive would be reduced because of shortage of money.I believe that unemployment problem is picky to solve. ** picky means extremely fussy or finicky, usually over trifles. >> I believe that unemployment problem is hard to solve.  Nevertheless, government should try to relive this problem. >> Nevertheless, the government should try to relieve this problem.

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