What are the advantages of starting a new job in a new company?
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There are some advantages of starting a new job in a new company.
First of all, It gives me a position that I want to do. It would motivate me to improve myself.
Second thing is the fact that I can live in Seoul, Capital of my country.
There are a lot of oppotunities and attraction or something.
And salary is also. But it is not the most important thing that make me a choice.
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Hi, Ian!
Thank you for doing your homework. Again, congratulation on your new job! Please take note of the corrections.
-T. Caitlyn
There are some advantages of starting a new job in a new company.
>> CORRECT
First of all, It gives me a position that I want to do.
First of all, It gives me a position that I want to do.
>> First of all, I get the position that I want.
It would motivate me to improve myself.
>> It will motivate me to improve.
Second thing is the fact that I can live in Seoul, Capital of my country.
Second thing is the fact that I can live in Seoul, Capital of my country.
>> Second, I can live in Seoul, the capital of my country.
There are a lot of oppotunities and attraction or something.
There are a lot of oppotunities and attraction or something.
>> There are a lot of opportunities and attractions.
And salary is also. But it is not the most important thing that make me a choice.
And salary is also. But it is not the most important thing that make me a choice.
>> Lastly, the salary offered is better but is not the most important thing I consider when making a choice.
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