What are the benefits and purpose of appliances?
학생이 쓴 원문
The benefits and purpose of appliances are, it makes people\'s lives convenient. Home appliances make rice themselves, clean air themselves, and fired food themselves, So the people don\'t need to do chores in primitive also the works is decreasing. And home appliances are getting more intelligent, they improve the quality of life. Appliances do a lot of work they clean the room from the dust, make foods warmer and make clear clothes.
강사 첨삭
Hi Risa,
Modern appliances have extra features, are user-friendly, and are more durable than traditional appliances. Most importantly, they are way more energy efficient than traditional appliances. Design and style are crucial factors in modern kitchen appliances. And since energy-efficient appliances spend the minimum amount of energy to complete their tasks, they are able to enhance the level of energy conservation. This conserved energy can then be used for a different purpose in the home or workplace. ~ Teacher QUENNY
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The benefits and purpose of appliances are, it makes people\'s lives convenient.
>> The benefits and purpose of appliances are, it makes people\'s lives convenient, easier, and faster.
Home appliances make rice themselves, clean air themselves, and fired food themselves, So the people don\'t need to do chores in primitive also the works is decreasing.
>> Home appliances make rice themselves, clean air themselves, and fire food themselves, so the people don\'t need to do chores in primitive ways and also the works and working time is decreasing.
And home appliances are getting more intelligent, they improve the quality of life.
>> And home appliances are getting more intelligent that they improve the quality of people\'s lives.
Appliances do a lot of work they clean the room from the dust, make foods warmer and make clear clothes.
>> Appliances do a lot of work they like to clean the room from the dust, make foods warmer and make our clothes clean.
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The benefits and purpose of appliances are, it makes people\'s lives convenient. Home appliances make rice themselves, clean air themselves, and fired food themselves, So the people don\'t need to do chores in primitive also the works is decreasing. And home appliances are getting more intelligent, they improve the quality of life. Appliances do a lot of work they clean the room from the dust, make foods warmer and make clear clothes.
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