What are the benefits of graduating from college? Does it also have disadvantages? If yes, what are
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Of course, there are a kind of the benefits of graduating from college. For example if you got graduated at college, you can get high salary, quick promotion and getting a job. But there are disadvantages too. Like tuition fee, it\'s hard to get a job even if you got graduated at college. On top of that crippling debts.
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Good job, Elic! You managed to create good explanations for your answers. You were also able to give both advantages and disadvantages. I placed some alternative sentences for items 1 and 2 because some words used need to be replaced with better suiting ones. On item 4, I understood your idea, however I placed a more detailed one to explain your point. The last sentence needed some extra to words to complete its thought. But nonetheless, you have made some nice statements! Keep it up!
- Teacher Raven
>> Of course, there are some benefits of graduating from college.
For example if you got graduated at college, you can get high salary, quick promotion and getting a job.
>> For example, if you graduated college you can get above average wages, quick promotion, or get a job easily.
But there are disadvantages too.
>> Correct.
Like tuition fee, it\'s hard to get a job even if you got graduated at college.
>> The student loan you had to get to pay your tuition fee would be difficult to pay even after graduating from college.
On top of that crippling debts.
>> On top of that, you may also have crippling debts.
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