What are the benefits of having smoking areas in workplaces?

2024-12-17 · 첨삭 강사 Caitlyn

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Currently i quit smoking about 2 month. smoking area in workplaces benefits are many adventage. fisrt, smoking area is seperate far away form non-smoker. so smoker don\'t have to attention to no smoker. second, smoking area is located top loof. so it\'s helpful about walking excercise. third, sharing information with co-workers and easy friendly. but smoke is not healty.

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Hi, [이름]!

You are right! Even though having a smoking area in a company is good because it can separate smokers from non-smokers and promote friendliness among colleagues, smoking is still unhealthy. Therefore, if it\'s possible to encourage people to stop smoking, that should be where the company focuses.

- T. Caitlyn

Currently i quit smoking about 2 month.

>> Currently, I have quit smoking for about 2 months.
smoking area in workplaces benefits are many adventage.

>> There are many advantages to having a smoking area in the workplace.
fisrt, smoking area is seperate far away form non-smoker.

>> First, the smoking area is separated far away from non-smokers.
so smoker don\'t have to attention to no smoker.

>> So smokers don\'t have to pay attention to non-smokers.
second, smoking area is located top loof.

>> Second, the smoking area is located on the top floor.
so it\'s helpful about walking excercise.

>> So it\'s helpful for walking exercise.
third, sharing information with co-workers and easy friendly.

>> Third, it allows sharing information with co-workers and promotes friendliness.
but smoke is not healty.

>> But smoking is unhealthy.

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