What are the benefits of listening to music? Give me at least three.
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First of all, listening to music makes me relaxed. Especially, it is very nice if I lay down in cozy room with relaxing music.
Secondly, it encourages me quite a lot. Sometime if we focus on the lyrics on which we listen to we can ease our complicated mind.
lastly, it motivates me in many ways. In fact, whenever I listen to music, a good idea comes up with my mind.
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What are the benefits of listening to music? Give me at least three.
First of all, listening to music makes me relaxed.
>>> CORRECT
Especially, it is very nice if I lay down in cozy room with relaxing music.
>>> Especially, it is very nice if I lay down in a cozy room with relaxing music.
Secondly, it encourages me quite a lot.
>>> CORRECT
Sometime if we focus on the lyrics on which we listen to we can ease our complicated mind.
>>> Sometimes if we just focus on the lyrics on the music we listen to, then we can ease our complicated mind.
lastly, it motivates me in many ways.
>>> CORRECT
In fact, whenever I listen to music, a good idea comes up with my mind.
>>> In fact, whenever I listen to music, a good idea comes in my mind.
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