What are the benefits of short travels and long travels?
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Short travels can save our money, but we cannot travel to lots of cities, because we don\'t have enough time to go visit.
Long travels can make us visit a lot of landmark, so that schedule may be convenient, but sometimes you may feel tired and boring.
I recommend that you choose which can make you happier. For example, My traveling schedule is different depend on where I go to travel. For example, If I visit Busan which is far to Seoul, That trip should be 3~4 nights, but If I can go any other city which is closer than Busan, It can be shorter.
Anyway, Considering your money, time and body condition, plan your own traveling schedule.
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Hi, [이름] Su!
Thank you for doing your homework. Great job in expressing your thoughts and ideas regarding the benefits of short and long travels. I can see how much you\'ve improved. Great Job!
-T. Caitlyn
Short travels can save our money,
>> Short travels can help save money.
but we cannot travel to lots of cities, because we don\'t have enough time to go visit.
>> But we cannot travel and visit a lot of cities because we don\'t have enough time.
Long travels can make us visit a lot of landmark, so that schedule may be convenient,
Long travels can make us visit a lot of landmark, so that schedule may be convenient,
>> Long travels provide a more convenient schedule, so we can visit a lot of landmarks.
but sometimes you may feel tired and boring.
>> But sometimes, it can also make us feel tired and bored.
I recommend that you choose which can make you happier.
I recommend that you choose which can make you happier.
>> I recommend that you choose whichever makes you happier.
For example, My traveling schedule is different depend on where I go to travel.
>> In my case, My travel schedule differs depending on where I will go.
For example, If I visit Busan which is far to Seoul, That trip should be 3~4 nights,
>>For example, If I visit Busan, which is far from Seoul, that trip should last for 3-4 nights.
but If I can go any other city which is closer than Busan, It can be shorter.
>> But if I\'m going to another city that is near Busan, the trip would be shorter.
Anyway, Considering your money, time and body condition, plan your own traveling schedule.
Anyway, Considering your money, time and body condition, plan your own traveling schedule.
>> Anyway, Consider your money, time and body condition in planning for your travel schedule.
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