What are the benefits of traveling?
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There are many things one can gain from traveling new places. We can get new friends, new stories, and new experiences. When we start to travel other places, we get better understanding about peoples living there, including their culture, and background. I think that one of the main benefits of travelling is relaxing from daily routine. We all have many stress and tension in our lives. Travelling forces us to temporarily disconnect from our normal routine.
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There are many things one can gain from traveling new places.
>> CORRECT!
We can get new friends, new stories, and new experiences.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We can make new friends, new stories, and new experiences.
When we start to travel other places, we get better understanding about peoples living there, including their culture, and background.
>> When we start to travel other places, we get better understanding about people living there, including their culture, and background.
I think that one of the main benefits of travelling is relaxing from daily routine.
>> CORRECT!
We all have many stress and tension in our lives.
>> CORRECT!
Travelling forces us to temporarily disconnect from our normal routine.
>> CORRECT!
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