What are the challenges of modern family life?

Happy Friday, Mary! You expressed your ideas about the challenges of modern family life very thoughtfully. I can see that you understand the situation in Korea well, and you explained the connection between the low birthrate, taxes, and pension issues clearly. Great job showing the cause-and-effect relationship! To improve your writing even more, focus on grammar accuracy and using more natural expressions. For example, try to  use clearer transitions like “As a result” or “This leads to.” With a bit more polishing, your explanations will sound even more professional and easy to follow. Keep up the good work, your reasoning is strong, and you’re improving each time!

-Teacher Wela 

I think birthrate is the most porblem of family life in perspective of nation.

>> I think the birth rate is the biggest problem in modern family life from a national perspective.

In fact, the birthrate decrease year by year in Korea.

>>  In fact, the birth rate decreases year by year in Korea.

This situation cause that younger generation need to pay more tax for elder generation.

>> This situation causes the younger generation to pay more taxes to support the elderly.

This tax is usually used for pension.

>> These taxes are usually used for pensions.

However, when younger generation goes to elder generation, they can\'t get their pension.

>>  However, when the younger generation becomes the older generation, they may not receive their pensions.

Because the budget is already exhausted.

>> because the budget will already be exhausted.

This situation make younger generation feel a lot of pressure.

>> This situation puts a lot of pressure on the younger generation.