What are the common gadgets used by children these days?
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There are over 70% children who have smartphone in South Korea and the rate much higher than my expectation. It is the highest rate in the world, even more, it soars for older children up to 90%. It is the best toy and communication tool in peer group, so It is not difficult thing to imagine that they could feel discrimination and bullying when they do not have it. In addition, there is phone for kids in South Korea. Young kids wear it like watch and they call parents or a teacher.
These situation is quite different with the past. When I was a kid, I did not have any electronic staff and some friends had a console to play games, so I used to went to my friend\'s house and played them, together.
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I also wondered about this topic, so I searched articles.
>>Correct
There are over 70% children who have smartphone in South Korea and the rate much higher than my expectation.
>>There are over 70% of children who has a smartphone in South Korea and the rate is much higher than my expectation.
It is the highest rate in the world, even more, it soars for older children up to 90%.
>>Correct
It is the best toy and communication tool in peer group, so It is not difficult thing to imagine that they could feel discrimination and bullying when they do not have it.
>>It is the best toy and communication tool in a peer group, so It is not difficult thing to imagine that they could feel discrimination and bullying when they do not have it.
In addition, there is phone for kids in South Korea.
>>In addition, there is a phone for kids in South Korea.
Young kids wear it like watch and they call parents or a teacher.
>>Young kids wear it like a watch and they call parents or a teacher.
These situation is quite different with the past.
>>These situation is quite different from the past.
When I was a kid, I did not have any electronic staff and some friends had a console to play games, so I used to went to my friend\'s house and played them, together.
>>When I was a kid, I did not have any electronic staff and some friends had a console to play games, so I used to go to my friend\'s house and played them together.
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