What are the dangers of having your own business?

2019-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 James

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There are some dangers of managing own business. Firstly, if it happens some problems regarding money, contracts or employees, I have to manage all of it. I should solve the problems and have a responsability as a boss. In addition, I think that i couldn\'t have my own time surprisingly. I believe that a boss must be at work place from the time the employee gets to work to the end of the day for running a business. A boss works one by one and takes care his employees and all the company\'s things. It sounds stressful.

강사 첨삭

Good morning [이름]! Your sentences are improving! Keep it up. :)

There are some dangers of managing own business. 

>>> There are some dangers of managing your own business. 

Firstly, if it happens some problems regarding money, contracts or employees, I have to manage all of it.

>>> CORRECT

I should solve the problems and have a responsability as a boss.

>>>I should solve the problems and have a responsibility as a boss.

In addition, I think that i couldn\'t have my own time surprisingly.

>>> In addition, I think that I couldn\'t have my own time surprisingly.

I believe that a boss must be at work place from the time the employee gets to work to the end of the day for running a business.

>>> I believe that a boss must be at work place from the time the employee gets to work until the end of the day for running a business. 

A boss works one by one and takes care his employees and all the company\'s things.

>>> A boss works one by one and takes care his employees and all the companies\' things.

It sounds stressful.

>>> CORRECT

>>OR: It sounds so stressful.

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