What are the disadvantages and advantages of shopping online?
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Hello [이름]. Thank you for your effort. You have a great point about shopping online. Below are some corrections for you.
-Teacher James-
The advantages of shopping online has a lot of things.
>>>The advantages of shopping online have a lot of things.
the keywords are convenient and efficiency.
>>> The keywords are convenient and efficient.
I think that we do not need to use some money and our time to go to actural shopes to buy something such as public transportation fee.
>>> I think that we do not need to use some money and time to go to actual shops to buy something, such as public transportation fee.
Also, only clicking can order the things we need .
>>> Also, just clicking we can order the things that we need.
It means that we are able to save our time.
>>> CORRECT
It cannot help being convenience. In other hands, the disadvantages of shopping online is that the order on the enternet have a possible to be differnt from real one. Thus, we can undergo to fail some orders.
>>> It\'s not convenient,
in other hands, the disadvantages of shopping online are that the
order on the internet have
a possible to be different from real one. Thus, we can undergo
to fail some orders.
As a result, shopping online have both side which is like prons and cons.
>>> As a result, shopping online has both sides which are like pros and cons.
we need to consider them and use it according to your occations.
>>> We need to consider them and use it according to your actions.
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