What are the disadvantages in living in the city?
학생이 쓴 원문
A lot of person live in the city, we are not easy to get a quite time in city.
If I go to the somewhere, people are be there.
Some festivals are opening that\'s like a horror movies, I don\'t like it.
And when I want to live in city, I have to pay a expensive rent .
If I want to buy my own house, that\'s impossible in Korea city.
It\' too expensive.
Also I can\'t see the blue sky and stars, because city light is too bright and pollution is really not good.
And it makes really bad what is my bronchus.
Next, I can\'t see a beautiful natural views, just buildings, asphalt road and apartments are being.
So If I want to see a natural views, I have to go somewhere and pay the trip money.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Simon! Thank you for doing another homework today! You did great in expressing yourself through writing in your homework today! Thank you for sharing your personal experiences as well. Thank you for trusting me to get to know you day by day. Great job! See you again tomorrow! :)
If I go to the somewhere, people are be there.
>>If I go somewhere, people are also there.
Some festivals are opening that\'s like a horror movies, I don\'t like it.
>>Some festivals are opening that looks like horror movies, I don\'t like it.
And when I want to live in city, I have to pay a expensive rent .
>>And when I have to live in the city, I have to pay an expensive rent.
If I want to buy my own house, that\'s impossible in Korea city.
>>If I want to buy my own house, that\'s impossible in a Korean city.
It\' too expensive.
>>CORRECT
Also I can\'t see the blue sky and stars, because city light is too bright and pollution is really not good.
>>CORRECT
And it makes really bad what is my bronchus.
>>And it has a lot of bad effects to plants.
Next, I can\'t see a beautiful natural views, just buildings, asphalt road and apartments are being.
>>Next, I can\'t see beautiful nature views, I can just see buildings, asphalt roads and apartments.
So If I want to see a natural views, I have to go somewhere and pay the trip money.
~Teacher Sheila
A lot of person live in the city, we are not easy to get a quite time in city.
>>A lot of person live in the city. so it\'s not easy for us to get a quiet time in the city.
>>A lot of person live in the city. so it\'s not easy for us to get a quiet time in the city.
If I go to the somewhere, people are be there.
>>If I go somewhere, people are also there.
Some festivals are opening that\'s like a horror movies, I don\'t like it.
>>Some festivals are opening that looks like horror movies, I don\'t like it.
And when I want to live in city, I have to pay a expensive rent .
>>And when I have to live in the city, I have to pay an expensive rent.
If I want to buy my own house, that\'s impossible in Korea city.
>>If I want to buy my own house, that\'s impossible in a Korean city.
It\' too expensive.
>>CORRECT
OR>>It costs a lot of money.
Also I can\'t see the blue sky and stars, because city light is too bright and pollution is really not good.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Also, I can\'t see the blue sky and stars because the city light is too bright and pollution is not really good.
And it makes really bad what is my bronchus.
>>And it has a lot of bad effects to plants.
Next, I can\'t see a beautiful natural views, just buildings, asphalt road and apartments are being.
>>Next, I can\'t see beautiful nature views, I can just see buildings, asphalt roads and apartments.
So If I want to see a natural views, I have to go somewhere and pay the trip money.
>>So, If I want to see a natural view, I have to go somewhere and pay the trip money.
OR>>So, If I want to see natural views, I have to go somewhere and pay the trip money.
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