What are the effects of getting angry?
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When I\'m getting angry, I would have negative effects. At first, My heart beat will so fast, blood pressure will be going up highly. Thus I would not make proper decision what I think about. I always know that negative effects are not good to me. So if I am getting angry about some situation, I usually breath again and again deeply. And I try to have a relaxation. This method is effective for me, but it is not effective occasionally. If it is not efftive for carming myself down, I have to sleep with listening the music what I most favorite directly as soon as I can after having some beer.
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When I\'m getting angry, I would have negative effects.
>>When I get angry. I usually have negative effects.
OR>>When I\'m angry, I would have negative effects.
OR>>There are negative effects when I\'m angry.
At first, My heart beat will so fast, blood pressure will be going up highly.
>>At first, my heart will beat so fast and my blood pressure will go high.
OR>>At first, my heart will beat so fast that affects my blood pressure to go high.
Thus I would not make proper decision what I think about.
>>Thus, I would not make proper decisions and cannot think about it properly.
I always know that negative effects are not good to me.
>>CORRECT
So if I am getting angry about some situation, I usually breath again and again deeply.
>>So, if I am getting angry about some situations, I usually breathe in a deep way repeatedly.
And I try to have a relaxation.
>>CORRECT
OR>>And I try to relax for a while.
This method is effective for me, but it is not effective occasionally.
>>CORRECT
If it is not efftive for carming myself down, I have to sleep with listening the music what I most favorite directly as soon as I can after having some beer.
>>If it is not effective for calming myself down, I have to sleep while listening to music which is my most favorite thing to do after having some beer.
OR>>If it is not effective for calming myself down, I have to sleep while listening to music after having some beer which is my most favorite thing to do.
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