What are the five things you have on your bucket list?
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First, I want to try extreme sports like sky diving, bungee jump, and Paragliding. Whenever I saw it anywhere, I\'am a little scared but I think it\'ll be fun, so I\'d really like to try them if I have a chance.
Second, I want to travel abroad with my family. At this time, there are conditions, it is not with Koreans on a package trip so with only our family, and use an English country. because, I transfer with others people and being a tour guide for my family.
Third, I want to drink and play overnight with my friends. because, I have a curfew, I can\'t experience this time in 20 years.
Then, I want to watch any performance like musical at Opera house in Sydney. because, Opera house is one of my favorite structure. and also I like to watch a musical, play, and drama too,
Finally, This is the goal I want to achieve in my college, that I want to go to an exchange student. So, I experience culture of other country and also i want to make foreign friends.
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Hello [이름] [이름]!
Your answer is nice. It\'s good you have explained your answer in detail. Keep it up! :)
-T. Maine
>>First, I want to try some extreme sports such as sky diving, bungee jumping, and paragliding.
Whenever I saw it anywhere, I\'am a little scared but I think it\'ll be fun, so I\'d really like to try them if I have a chance.
>>Whenever I see it anywhere, I\'m a little scared but I think it\'ll be fun. So I\'d really like to try them if I have a chance.
Second, I want to travel abroad with my family.
Second, I want to travel abroad with my family.
>>Correct.
At this time, there are conditions, it is not with Koreans on a package trip so with only our family, and use an English country.
>>This time, there are some conditions. I would like to travel to an English country on a package trip.
because, I transfer with others people and being a tour guide for my family.
>>It is because I will be with my family members and I will be a tour guide for them.
Third, I want to drink and play overnight with my friends.
Third, I want to drink and play overnight with my friends.
>>Correct.
because, I have a curfew, I can\'t experience this time in 20 years.
>>I have a curfew and I can\'t experience this time in 20 years.
Then, I want to watch any performance like musical at Opera house in Sydney.
Then, I want to watch any performance like musical at Opera house in Sydney.
>>Then I want to watch a performance like a musical in an Opera house in Sydney.
because, Opera house is one of my favorite structure.
>>The Opera house is one of my favorite structures in Australia.
and also I like to watch a musical, play, and drama too,
>>In addition, I like to watch musical plays and dramas, too.
Finally, This is the goal I want to achieve in my college, that I want to go to an exchange student.
Finally, This is the goal I want to achieve in my college, that I want to go to an exchange student.
>>Finally, this is the goal that I want to achieve in my college life. I want to be an exchange student.
So, I experience culture of other country and also i want to make foreign friends.
>>So that I could experience the culture of another country and I want to make friends with foreigners.
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