What are the good and bad points of using computers?

2019-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 May

학생이 쓴 원문

Can you imagine people live without computers?. I definitely say \"no\" because computers are installed anywhere we are. The advantages of using computers are uncountable. I used to bet with my friend about something we are not sure and get the answer from the book after few days. However, we can find any information through internet web pages regardless where we are. In the bank, people needed to visit a bank if they want to transfer, withdraw money and pay their utility fees. It took quite a lot of time however, we can do any bank related tasks with our smartphone in few minutes nowadays. But there are still disadvantages. One of the worst things that occur by using computers is addiction of computer game. Major concern to raise children is controlling the time that children play computer game. All parents know that they can\'t prohibit games.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for doing your homework [이름]! You are right. Technologies are everywhere.

But there are some areas that don\'t have an internet access. We, who live in cities,

may find it impossible to live comfortably without internet. Thanks for sharing.

See you later. ^^

~~Teacher May~~

Can you imagine people live without computers?

>> Can you imagine life without computers?

I definitely say \"no\" because computers are installed anywhere we are.

>> I can definitely say \"no\" because computers are everywhere.

The advantages of using computers are uncountable.

I used to bet with my friend about something we are not sure and get the answer from the book after few days.

>> CORRECT

However, we can find any information through internet web pages regardless where we are.

>> Actually, we can find any information through the internet wherever we are.

In the bank, people needed to visit a bank if they want to transfer, withdraw money and pay their utility fees.

>> People need to visit a bank if they want to transfer, to withdraw money and to pay their bills.

It took quite a lot of time however, we can do any bank related tasks with our smartphone in few minutes nowadays.

>> It takes quite a lot of time however, we can now make online transactions in just few minutes using our mobile nowadays.

But there are still disadvantages.

>> CORRECT

One of the worst things that occur by using computers is addiction of computer game.

>> One of the worst things that can happen by using computers is addiction of computer games.

Major concern to raise children is controlling the time that children play computer game.

>> This is the major concern that parents have. It\'s hard to control children from playing.
All parents know that they can\'t prohibit games.

>> CORRECT

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