What are the good and bad things about tourism?
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There are many advantages and disadvantages about tourism.
Firstly, the most good thing is we can earn a lot of money if some places become famous.
People overseas will come here to look around there and spend much money.
Since then, it can lead to growth of economy and people can get many jobs related to tourism.
However, there is also a worrying problem to solve in tourism.
I heard whenever many people visit famous places, people who live there are always suffering from noise problems.
As a result, it makes them to go other cities to get away from those noise.
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There are many advantages and disadvantages about tourism.
>>CORRECT!
Firstly, the most good thing is we can earn a lot of money if some places become famous.
>>Firstly, the best thing about it is we can earn a lot of money if some places become famous.
People overseas will come here to look around there and spend much money.
>>People overseas will come to visit the place and spend a lot of money.
Since then, it can lead to growth of economy and people can get many jobs related to tourism.
>>Because of it, there will be growth in the economy and people can get many jobs related to tourism.
However, there is also a worrying problem to solve in tourism.
>> CORRECT!
I heard whenever many people visit famous places, people who live there are always suffering from noise problems.
>>CORRECT!
>>OR: I heard whenever many people visit famous places, local complain about the noise.
As a result, it makes them to go other cities to get away from those noise.
>>As a result, it causes them to go to other cities to get away from the noise.
>>OR: As a consequence, they move to a different avoid being disturbed.
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