What are the health care problems in your country?
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These days, there is a demonstration about doctors in my country. There are several reasons. First, the cosmetic surgery is concentrated on the students because of a high demand. But, the pediatric isn\'t [이름]ce the birth rate went to down. And, doctors of emergency room get a lot of complaints from patients. Second, most infrastructures are in the Seoul. So, doctors don\'t want to work countryside. It\'s uncomfortable and a lack of manpower. Last of all, it\'s a quite stupid policy. The government in South Korea tend to make up just finance. They think just money can handle an issue.
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Hi, Eric!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
These days, there is a demonstration about doctors in my country.
>> These days, there is a demonstration for doctors in my country.
There are several reasons.
>> CORRECT!First, the cosmetic surgery is concentrated on the students because of a high demand.
>> CORRECT!But, the pediatric isn\'t [이름]ce the birth rate went to down.
>> But, pediatrics isn\'t, [이름]ce the birth rate went to down.
And, doctors of emergency room get a lot of complaints from patients.
>> CORRECT!Second, most infrastructures are in the Seoul.
>> Second, most infrastructures are in Seoul.
So, doctors don\'t want to work countryside.
>> So, doctors don\'t want to work in the countryside.
It\'s uncomfortable and a lack of manpower.
>> It\'s uncomfortable because of the lack of manpower.
Last of all, it\'s quite a stupid policy.
>> CORRECT!The government in South Korea tend to make up just finance.
>> The government in South Korea tend to make up just for finance.
They think just money can handle an issue.
>> They think that money can handle an issue.
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