What are the most efficient ways to look for a job in your country?

2019-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 May

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In my country, we are always using an application called Albamon which shows many jobs wherever you are. It is not only find a job but also upload your application and companies can see your form. It can also recommend you what is fit to you if you are setting disciplines. For example, if you want to teach students, you set the category about teaching then you can see a lot of lists. In the past, the case about my parents, they were using newspapers for getting a job. If they found a job which they want , they just could call there. It\'s not the end of tasks. If they allowed their supervisor to apply, they should send their application by a letter or submit it directly. I think that all tasks for getting a job were very complicated. Have they worked hard for a long time because its tasks are very complicated? I don\'t know the real fact but it\'s true that young people quit the job fast compared with the older generation.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thanks for sharing. I think that applying for a job in your country is harder than here.

I don\'t know much about the employment there but it\'s not really easy. Filipinos who want to work in

Korea also work hard and are patient enough to get a job there. I\'ve heard that some people should

wait for a year to get a job. In the Philippines, we can get a job as early as one day. Let\'s talk more about

this later. See you! ^^

~~Teacher May~~

In my country, we are always using an application called Albamon which shows many jobs wherever you are.

>> In my country, we always use an application called Albamon which shows many job vacancies.

It is not only find a job but also upload your application and companies can see your form.

>> It is not only for finding a job but also for submitting an application so that companies can see them.

It can also recommend you what is fit to you if you are setting disciplines.

>> It can also recommend you what job fits you if you are setting disciplines.

For example, if you want to teach students, you set the category about teaching then you can see a lot of lists.

>> For example, if you want to teach students, you\'ll be set to the category on teaching then you can see a lot of options.
In the past, the case about my parents, they were using newspapers for getting a job.

>> In the past, people used newspapers for getting a job, like what my parents did.  

If they found a job which they want , they just could call there. It\'s not the end of tasks.

>> If they found their desired job, they just could call but it didn\'t end there.

 If they allowed their supervisor to apply, they should send their application by a letter or submit it directly.

>> If they were qualified to apply, they should send their application letter or submit it directly.
 I think that all tasks for getting a job were very complicated.

Have they worked hard for a long time because its tasks are very complicated?

I don\'t know the real fact but it\'s true that young people quit the job fast compared with the older generation.

>> CORRECT

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