What are the most important features when determining someone\'s beauty?
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We shouldn’t judge people based on their looks. Beauty is only skin-deep, as the saying goes. Moreover, someone’s appearance doesn’t tell us anything about how kind they are, anything else about their personality and so on. But it’s hard to ignore the way a person looks. Something about attractive people makes us want to watch them. We can’t take our eyes off a good-looking people. Although, there is a standard of beauty in each nations or countries, most standards we have about buauty are simular so, we can tell who are the most attractive among people. In Korea, people prefer to have white skin, big eyes and higher nose because many people think that those people are beautiful. According to the research, things that are familar looks more attractive. That\'s why each countries have their own standard of beauty. Recently, there is a movement about beauty that people want to have healthy body, so many work out to shape their body healthier. I believe that this is very positive movement
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We shouldn’t judge people based on their looks.
>> CORRECT!Beauty is only skin-deep, as the saying goes.
>> CORRECT!Moreover, someone’s appearance doesn’t tell us anything about how kind they are, anything else about their personality and so on.
>> CORRECT!But it’s hard to ignore the way a person looks.
>> CORRECT!Something about attractive people makes us want to watch them.
>> CORRECT!We can’t take our eyes off a good-looking people.
>> We can’t take our eyes off from good-looking people.
Although, there is a standard of beauty in each nations or countries, most standards we have about buauty are simular so, we can tell who are the most attractive among people.
>> Although, there is a standard of beauty in each nations or countries, most standards we have about beauty are similar so, we can tell who are the most attractive among people.
In Korea, people prefer to have white skin, big eyes and higher nose because many people think that those people are beautiful.
>> CORRECT!In Korea, people prefer to have white skin, big eyes and higher nose because many people think that those people are beautiful.
According to the research, things that are familar looks more attractive.
>> According to the research, things that are familiar look more attractive.
That\'s why each countries have their own standard of beauty.
>> CORRECT!Recently, there is a movement about beauty that people want to have healthy body, so many work out to shape their body healthier.
>> CORRECT!I believe that this is very positive movement
>> I believe that this is a very positive movement.
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