What are the most important things in Traveling?
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Good afternoon. :) Thank you once again for answering the question. :)
You are right, in traveling, the important things to be brought are our first
priority. :)
And of course, we have to have a control of our own attitude. Be good enough to
control it. :)
Anyway, your answer is perfect. I would just like you to study the corrections below. :)
Have a great day ahead :)
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~~ Teacher Kris
There are many things to prerare materially.
>> Correct
Also it depends on the place where to go.
>> Correct
If we go to travel abroad, it is required such as passport, exchange money/credit card, medicine for emergency and so on.
>> If we travel abroad, it is a requirement to bring with us our passport, exchange money/credit card, medicine for emergency and so on.
On the other hand if we have a domestic travel, it is required such as money/credit card, mobile charger.
>> On the other hand, if we have a domestic travel, it is a requirement to bring with our money/credit card and mobile chargers.
However I think that the most important thing is attitude for travel.
>> However, I think that the most important thing in traveling is one self\'s attitude.
We can learn the new information/knowledeg and experience through the travel.
>> we can learn or ac quire information/knowledge and great experiences through traveling.
But if we cannot afford to enjoy our travel, the travel will be ruined. ( We can\'t get everythings )
>> But, if we cannot afford to enjoy our travel/trip, everything will be ruined; and we can we can\'t get everything we want.
For example, we have a trevel with family. At that time, my head is filled with miscellaneous things such as company job, the travel will act as a stress for me.
>> For example, traveling with my family; and at that time, my head was filled with miscellaneous or bothersome things because of my job in the company. In that case, I would get stressed and act something which enable my bad behavior to explode.
So in my opinion, the most important thing is attitude for travel in traveling.
>> So, in my opinion, the mot important thing in traveling is having the ability to deal with one self\'s attitude.
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